IELTS TOEFL Writing Full essay (high score)

Adam introduces the topic of writing an essay for IELTS and TOEFL, emphasizing the similarities in approach despite differences in essay length and time constraints. He stresses the importance of planning to maintain focus and coherence throughout the essay. Adam outlines the essay task, which involves discussing the role of government in controlling media to reduce youth violence, and clarifies that the essay should focus on whether the government should censor media, not on the presence of violence itself.

The paragraph explains the process of planning an essay by brainstorming ideas around the main topic and subtopic, and deciding on the position (agree or disagree) based on which arguments come to mind more easily. Adam chooses to argue against government control, citing various reasons such as the multifaceted nature of youth influence, the role of education, and the importance of parental guidance. He then translates this plan into an introduction that outlines the essay's roadmap, including the topic, the question, and his opinion with a general reason for it.

Adam provides guidance on writing the introduction, emphasizing a structure that answers four key questions to set a clear roadmap for the reader. He presents two versions of the introduction, one for TOEFL and a shorter one for IELTS, highlighting the importance of adapting to the word count requirements. The body paragraphs delve into the argument, with the first focusing on the various external influences on youth and the unreasonableness of blaming media alone for societal violence. The second paragraph discusses the government's role and the responsibilities of parents in shaping their children's exposure to different forms of media.

The paragraph explores the implications of allowing government censorship, arguing that it could lead to an overreach into all aspects of citizens' lives. Adam contends that restricting access to media will not prevent violence, which is part of human nature. He suggests that censorship might even prompt citizens to fight for their freedoms, potentially increasing violent incidents. The paragraph reinforces the idea that society, not the government, should address the issue of youth violence.

Adam concludes the essay by reiterating the thesis that societal patterns are influenced by various factors and that society, not the government, should control what is seen by the youth. He advises keeping the conclusion brief and to the point, without reintroducing the pronoun 'I'. Two versions of the essay are presented, one for TOEFL with 383 words and another for IELTS with 300 words, with Adam noting the importance of meeting the minimum word count for each test to achieve a high score.

In the final paragraph, Adam encourages viewers to practice writing, master the skill, and seek help on his website's forum for any questions. He also invites viewers to like the video, subscribe to his channel, and return for future videos that will further assist in improving writing skills and passing tests.